Six more
sentences from ‘Changing the Future’.
For those who have been following my previous excerpts, we’re now three
chapters before the end. Lisa has discovered that Paul was one of the
scientists at the observation post on Mount Lakuda when it erupted and caused a huge rockslide. Now the
television news report is broadcasting the last recording from the post before
contact was lost.
She stared at
the picture of Mount Lakuda on the screen, while a slightly distorted voice said,
“This could be the big one—five point six and it’s still shaking, but no change
yet from—”
Another voice
broke in from somewhere in the background. “Avalanche! Paul, get inside—oh, my
God—”
There was a
roar, static crackling, and then silence.
Lisa stared
wide-eyed at Millie, but no words would come, only a horrifying vision in her
mind of a steel trailer being crushed under hundreds of rock boulders.
Many thanks
for all your comments each week!
And this is where we leave Lisa and Paul (yes, I’m really mean, aren’t I?)
Next week I shall start to tease you with some excerpts from my November release, ‘Her Only Option’, a contemporary romance set in Egypt.
And this is where we leave Lisa and Paul (yes, I’m really mean, aren’t I?)
Next week I shall start to tease you with some excerpts from my November release, ‘Her Only Option’, a contemporary romance set in Egypt.
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Great way to continue piling on the tension: giving her a shred of hope and then wrenching it away again. Nicely done :) Great 6.
ReplyDeleteWell done You can feel her fear and anxiety.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the earlier comments. You've kept that tension rolling naturally and we're definitely along for the ride.
ReplyDeleteSo intense, and I can really feel Lisa's dread and heartbreak. Great six!! Can't wait to read some from your next release--that one looks like another winner, too!!
ReplyDeleteAck!! Wonderful cliffhanger! Great Six!
ReplyDeleteOh,dear, that's frustrating. Once again, Paula, you've put together a great six!
ReplyDeleteYou're killing me...you are doing some awesome tension building Paula!
ReplyDeleteGreat six.
ReplyDeleteThat's horrifying. Well done. :)
ReplyDeleteNice! And may I say, you're evil for not continuing with this next week. Evil! ;)
ReplyDeleteClare - she's on an emotional see-saw at the moment, isn't she?
ReplyDeleteSabrina - glad you can sense her feelings
J.M. - it's a rough ride at present ;-)
K.E. Thanks - hope you'll like the next one too.
Rae - I love cliffhangers LOL
Thanks, Jess, Christine, Sue and Ellin :-)
Tonya - yep, I know :-D
You weren't joking that things were going to get worse.
ReplyDeleteVery well done, amped up the tension EVEN further - this has been a terrific series of sixes!
ReplyDeleteI can only imagine how she must feel, but the truth of her feelings have got to be ringing in her head. Oh, and poor Paul, I hope he's okay :) Fabulous tension filled 6.
ReplyDeleteStevie - toldya LOL!
ReplyDeleteVeronica - many thanks!
S.J. You're right, it takes a crisis to make you realise your real feelings.
I could feel her emotions... Great six!
ReplyDeleteThat's quite a cliffhanger you've left us with! Tense six!
ReplyDeleteNothing like a dramatic moment to bring out the emotions. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteGreat suspense. Very dramatic!
ReplyDeleteGoodness, that tension was nerve-wracking! Great job!
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