Another eight sentences from ‘Irish Inheritance’, my current
work in progress. Having been told she is about to inherit a large sum of money
and a share of a house in Ireland, Jenna is then informed she needs to go to Dublin
to meet with someone from the Irish law firm dealing with the estate. Her lawyer
says he will contact her employer and request leave of absence for her. Here is Jenna's response:
“Actually, Mr. Haslam, I don’t have an employer, at least
not at the moment. I’m an actress and I’m—er—between jobs at the moment.”
“I see.” The lawyer cleared his throat, and Jenna had the
impression she might as well have said she was a nightclub stripper. “Well, of
course, that simplifies things.”
Not really, she thought, twisting her lips wryly, but maybe
Charley would lend her the money for a quick trip to Dublin. No, hold on. If she was due to inherit
twenty-five thousand pounds plus half a house, perhaps she could get some kind
of advance.
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delighted you like the beginning of this story!
This is a photo of the small town of Clifden in the west of Couny Galway,
where a lot of this story will take place.
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Love the description and the exchange between them. Yes an advance sounds the better option!
ReplyDeleteFabulous! Can't wait to read the rest :o)
ReplyDeleteyou always choose fabulous backdrops to your stories. Your snippet is no slouch either :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff.
I love the way she thinks! Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteGreat word choices. Her personality is consistent and I love the 'had the impression she might as well have said she was a nightclub stripper'. :D
ReplyDeleteYes--an advance would be great. I can't wait to read more. Loved Ireland and will enjoy visiting the lovely country through your words. :)
ReplyDeleteAn advance sounds perfect, it's definitely more liberating for her. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteI'm really looking forward to her arriving and finding out who has the other half! Excellent excerpt today...
ReplyDeleteThank you all! Hope this snippet's told you a little more about her. She'll be off to Ireland soon - but first you'll meet the 'other half' of the inheritance!
ReplyDeleteI wonder how her co-heir feels about actresses? :)
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to read more!
I think you've been reading a later chapter, Sarah - or else you're reading my mind! :-)
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like she doesn't think to highly of her profession either. You might think of changing "I'm between jobs" to "I'm between scripts" and if she's not embarrassed about her profession, you might think of taking out her hesitation. I'm curious to see where this goes and I love the premise, Paula. :)
ReplyDeleteGood point, Siobhan - thanks for mentioning that!
ReplyDeleteYes, an advance isn't a bad idea at this point.
ReplyDeleteGo to Ireland, Jenna! It's a magical place.
Kate, she's an out of work actress, she needs that advance. And yes, Ireland is wonderful!
ReplyDeleteI can't wait for her to get to the house.
ReplyDeleteA lot happens before she eventually gets there, Elaine! You have to wait until Chapter 4 for that.
ReplyDeleteThis read very smoothly and moved the story right along. Looking forward to more!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Haslam is the name of our governor. He's awful, but your writing is great.
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Ireland? I'm in! Went to Ireland a couple of years ago and it's delightful. A story set there immediately has my attention and this has the makings of a lot of fun! Looking forward to more!
ReplyDeleteHeck yeah! Make them pay for the trip! Good snippet.
ReplyDeleteHope the co-inheritor is a decent sort.
ReplyDeletePaula,
ReplyDeleteI love Jenna's reaction here. She sounds like she needs a turn of good luck.
Smiles
Steph
Many thanks, Joyce S and Joyce L!
ReplyDeleteNan, I love Ireland too.
She's an out-of-work actress, History S - no spare cash for trip to Ireland!
Sue - more about the co-inheritor later, Sue!
Thanks, Steph!
After her remark about being an actress, I'm curious about it too - plays? Movies? Commercials? But I wouldn't have automatically guessed stripper. :)
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