Sunday 31 March 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors


Another eight sentences from ‘Irish Inheritance’, my current work in progress. Having been told she is about to inherit a large sum of money and a share of a house in Ireland, Jenna is then informed she needs to go to Dublin to meet with someone from the Irish law firm dealing with the estate. Her lawyer says he will contact her employer and request leave of absence for her. Here is Jenna's response:
 
“Actually, Mr. Haslam, I don’t have an employer, at least not at the moment. I’m an actress and I’m—er—between jobs at the moment.”
 
“I see.” The lawyer cleared his throat, and Jenna had the impression she might as well have said she was a nightclub stripper. “Well, of course, that simplifies things.”
 
Not really, she thought, twisting her lips wryly, but maybe Charley would lend her the money for a quick trip to Dublin. No, hold on. If she was due to inherit twenty-five thousand pounds plus half a house, perhaps she could get some kind of advance.
 
Many thanks for visiting each week, and for your comments. I’m delighted you like the beginning of this story!
 
 
This is a photo of the small town of Clifden in the west of Couny Galway,
where a lot of this story will take place.
 


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25 comments:

  1. Love the description and the exchange between them. Yes an advance sounds the better option!

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  2. Fabulous! Can't wait to read the rest :o)

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  3. you always choose fabulous backdrops to your stories. Your snippet is no slouch either :-)
    Great stuff.

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  4. I love the way she thinks! Terrific snippet!

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  5. Great word choices. Her personality is consistent and I love the 'had the impression she might as well have said she was a nightclub stripper'. :D

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  6. Yes--an advance would be great. I can't wait to read more. Loved Ireland and will enjoy visiting the lovely country through your words. :)

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  7. An advance sounds perfect, it's definitely more liberating for her. Thanks for sharing!

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  8. I'm really looking forward to her arriving and finding out who has the other half! Excellent excerpt today...

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  9. Thank you all! Hope this snippet's told you a little more about her. She'll be off to Ireland soon - but first you'll meet the 'other half' of the inheritance!

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  10. I wonder how her co-heir feels about actresses? :)

    Can't wait to read more!

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  11. I think you've been reading a later chapter, Sarah - or else you're reading my mind! :-)

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  12. It sounds like she doesn't think to highly of her profession either. You might think of changing "I'm between jobs" to "I'm between scripts" and if she's not embarrassed about her profession, you might think of taking out her hesitation. I'm curious to see where this goes and I love the premise, Paula. :)

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  13. Good point, Siobhan - thanks for mentioning that!

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  14. Yes, an advance isn't a bad idea at this point.

    Go to Ireland, Jenna! It's a magical place.

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  15. Kate, she's an out of work actress, she needs that advance. And yes, Ireland is wonderful!

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  16. I can't wait for her to get to the house.

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  17. A lot happens before she eventually gets there, Elaine! You have to wait until Chapter 4 for that.

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  18. This read very smoothly and moved the story right along. Looking forward to more!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  19. Haslam is the name of our governor. He's awful, but your writing is great.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com

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  20. Ireland? I'm in! Went to Ireland a couple of years ago and it's delightful. A story set there immediately has my attention and this has the makings of a lot of fun! Looking forward to more!

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  21. Heck yeah! Make them pay for the trip! Good snippet.

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  22. Hope the co-inheritor is a decent sort.

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  23. Paula,
    I love Jenna's reaction here. She sounds like she needs a turn of good luck.

    Smiles
    Steph

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  24. Many thanks, Joyce S and Joyce L!

    Nan, I love Ireland too.

    She's an out-of-work actress, History S - no spare cash for trip to Ireland!

    Sue - more about the co-inheritor later, Sue!

    Thanks, Steph!


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  25. After her remark about being an actress, I'm curious about it too - plays? Movies? Commercials? But I wouldn't have automatically guessed stripper. :)

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