Sunday 30 September 2012

Six Sentence Sunday


Six more sentences from ‘Changing the Future’. For those who have been following my previous excerpts, we’re now three chapters before the end. Lisa has just discovered that Paul was one of the scientists at the observation post on Mount Lakuda when it erupted. The room has swirled around her.
 
Millie pushed her head down towards her knees. “Take some deep breaths, Lisa.”
 
Lisa did so and gradually the dizziness receded.
 
“I told him go to hell,” she whispered as she lifted her head again.
 
“Here, drink this,” Millie said, offering a glass of water to her, but all Lisa could do was raise anguished eyes to her friend.
 
“The last time I saw him—the last thing I said to him—I told him to go to hell—and now this—oh, God—”
 
Blurb: Lisa Marshall is stunned when celebrated volcanologist Paul Hamilton comes back into her life at the college where she now teaches. Despite their acrimonious break-up several years earlier, they soon realise the magnetic attraction between them is stronger than ever. However, the past is still part of the present, not least when Paul discovers Lisa has a young son. They can’t change that past, but will it take a volcanic eruption to help them change the future?
 
'Changing the Future' is available at $3.99 on Amazon
 
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22 comments:

  1. Awww, this is heart-rending stuff. Wow!

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  2. Very powerful six! Excellent tension, and it's so clear that she has tender feelings for him as well as her feelings of guilt/horror at what she'd told him. Excellent.

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  3. Thanks, Tory and K.E. - so glad you're sensing the very mixed feelings right now :-)

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  4. Ah guilt, it always makes for a such an enjoyable read. Great job, Paula!

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  5. Love that she's caught a little karma she'll have to deal with. Nice job!

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  6. That would be a terrible thing to feel, and there's no way to console someone about the last words they said to someone. Hopefully, they're not and she'll get a chance to tell him what she felt when she thought that those were the last words she said t him.Great six.

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  7. Great tension and set for later action. You can feel the guilt eating her up insides.

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  8. I missed no end of SSS but this snippet has pulled me right into the story. Very powerful.

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  9. Well, that explains her reaction from last week. Great six! :)

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  10. Jess - you're right about feeling guilty now!

    Sandra - good poiint about karma.

    J.M. - yes, too horrible to think those might be the last words you said to someone.

    Sabrina - it's an awful memory for her right now.

    Thanks, Sherry :-)

    Jessica - you're right. Not only does she have to face the fact of him being in danger, she has the grief of knowing her last words to him.

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  11. Really good tension and emotion. I really felt Lisa's heartache, worry and guilt. Great job :)

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  12. Aww, terrific six. I'm really feeling for her here. Fantastic emotion. You're very good at that, tugging on my heartstrings.

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  13. Oh, she seems so upset! Great emotional six, Paula!

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  14. Awww...I feel so bad for her. I hope she gets the chance to make things right!

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  15. Thanks, Sara :-)

    Clare - so glad her worry and guilt came across to you.

    Joanne - seems like we know how to tug each other's heartstrings ;-)

    Thanks, Sandra!

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  16. Such a hard moment when you realize what you've done. My heart goes out to her. Her life is kind of just dangling there now, what will she do? Fab 6.

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  17. Terrific six. There's a huge amount of emotion in that six. Wll written.

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  18. Well, erupting volcanoes are not a bad substitute for hell. (OK, I've read the whole book, but this was a very powerful part.)

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  19. You're really ramping up the suspense here.

    Great six.

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  20. S.J. - as you say, one real heart-rending moment for her.

    Thanks, Ellin :-)

    Many thanks, Sue - and as you know Paul is in a kind of hell right now. Thanks so much for reading my book.

    Stevie - if you think this is suspense, wait till next week :-D

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  21. Great emotion in your six, Paula!

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